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Poetry by the-jackyll




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i.

she
doesn't speak

anymore.



if flesh
is a gift

then her presence
is spent.



and he'd
buy the world
for a word

from her lips.


ii.

he
counts the future
among
her possessions

daily.



the seconds
will never
amount
to the first

time he held her;



his hands
might as well
be the earth
that embraces her

forevermore.


iii.

she
still
doesn't speak,



but he
cannot
stop listening.
this is about
one
with
none
to lose.




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i feel terrible for borrowing the structure of this poem of mine because of how deeply important that poem was to me. at least it was inspired by the same character.
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the-jackyll Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2010
That's just beautiful, very emotive and evocative. :+fav:
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010   Writer
Many thanks!

:hug:
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ascaaearwen Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010
How do you do it? Just...how?
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2010   Writer
A little bit of luck, I suppose.

:)
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ascaaearwen Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2010
You know luck has nothing to do with it.
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Sorelliena Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2010   Digital Artist
This... touches something deep in my heart. :hug:
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2010   Writer
:hug:
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:iconmelpomene-tragicmuse:
this is really striking, the structure definitely sets a tone for each word... love how it sends shivers while reading, definitely penetrating...
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2010   Writer
Glad you liked it. :D
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losingmyfaith Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2010  Student Writer
Wonderful :heart:
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