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these shoulders
aren't bearing
enough

though it feels
like my bones
are returning
to dust

my blades
are brittle
foundations
are weak

you deserve
more resolve
than I've offered
to speak




make me
into structure
and order
and peace

a collection
of clothing
without cut
or crease

build me
into towers
of solace
to seek

and when I
break down
be the comfort
she needs
it appears
there is truth
in abandoned
clichés

if your love
is the truth
you will give
it away
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:iconsilverluminosity:
silverluminosity Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2010
the rhyming doesn't miss a beat, as usual.
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:icongliitchlord:
gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2010   Writer
:bump:
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:iconwolfie-miyaku:
Wolfie-Miyaku Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010  Professional General Artist
This ... hmm you sure have me thinking <3
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:icongliitchlord:
gliitchlord Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2010   Writer
That's what I like to hear!

:D
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:iconfallenidle:
fallenidle Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010  Professional Writer
Excellent in its crisp simplicity, and without missing a beat of emotion.
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:icongliitchlord:
gliitchlord Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2010   Writer
I hoped the message would be clear ( though I do have a tendency to obfuscate things (: )

Thanks!
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