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you like the way
the i slants,
an error's
guidance
in a sea
of hyphens.

sans-serif
in cropped crests
made to full-
stop breasts
beating;
an obsess-
ion breathing
in lost chests.

now a motive
is seething
with options;
play thief
and proceed greedily,
often.

dive deep
and drink
the leap's froth;
breath is only
as sweet as the
speech that breeds thought.
spake the drowned

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Oh my. This is rather unexpected! Thank you all you lovely people for reading and enjoying and generally being awesome. I am updating this from my phone on my lunch break (which thank goodness for dA updates that allow me to do that) so I will be thanking you all when I get to my desktop, but know that your visit to my little corner of the internet has made my day.

Also for everyone wondering, NicSwaner had the original meaning just about right. I stumbled upon the user Is-lnds and quickly developed a poetcrush something fierce. Be sure to click the + and give the inspiration some love!

Keep arting,
C
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Given 2012-11-02
ISLNDS by ~skerd22 is best read aloud. Don't forget to breathe afterwards. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )

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Hayleyishayley Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
'breath is only
as sweet as the
speech that breeds thought.'

I love these lines. They keep popping in to my head unexpectedly since I read this :')
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012   Writer
I'm a virus.

:D
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salmonella-poisoned Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
the end is just so good I just don't even know man
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012   Writer
I'm glad it made an impression. :D
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prairiedaisy Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012   Writer
charles, you beauty! congrats! it's well deserved. :)
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:icongliitchlord:
gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012   Writer
Thank you, darling. I always love hearing from you.
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prairiedaisy Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012   Writer
:glomp:
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Solaces Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
Wow, it is quite a treat to read aloud. Delicate, surreal, and exquisite!
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
I like to think in spoken word ;D

Glad you enjoyed it!
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Saphyre-skies Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Fantastic sound, rhyme, beautiful poem. Congratulations :hug:
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
:glomp:

Thanks so much!
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aeonsonance Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
I love it! It's so phonaesthetically delicious, and every turn each word takes you is a delightful surprise! Looking forward to reading more.
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
That's definitely a new word for me. Glad you liked it!
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aeonsonance Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012
Well, it might not be a "word" per se... more of a term "phonaesthetics" and so naturally, if aesthetically is a word, then why shouldn't phonaesthetically also be?
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LostInTheMorning Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so beautiful. It's perfect and. . .and. . .indescribable. The language is full of flow and. . .wow.
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
:blush:

Thanks for the kind words!
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LostInTheMorning Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012   Writer
congratulations! well deserved, this is beautiful <3
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
Thanks! I'm flattered!
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Unabiding Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is really awesome though I don't understand much of it
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
Also thank you. :D
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Unabiding Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
Meaning in literature is a pretty flexible thing. But I updated the author's comments with my original motivation.
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ArtisticAfflare Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
I am stunned, this is amazing! I think you got the rhythm of this poem absolutely perfect :)
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
Aww, thanks! I'm a big fan of rhythmic poetry. I think I hear it in my head as spoken word 90% of the time.
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gogocherryrose Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
:heart:
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
:glomp:
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PvtDexterGrif Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love the rythm of it a but in some places I can't make sense of it, but when I could the flow of the words were stunning.
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
Can't make sense of the rhythm or the meaning? Because both tend to be subjective :D
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IllEatYourself Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I am wondering what the title has to do with the rest of it, and I find it a bit confusing, but I still like it!
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
It's kind of a tribute poem. I updated the description to clarify. ;D

But the best thing about poetry is that meaning is a rather fluid concept.
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IllEatYourself Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yup! Well, kinda. I like poetry of almost any kind, as long as it seems to have some sort of story behind it and it is understandable in some way. You know, poetry that seems to have some sort of thought put into it, rather than just sounding like a tiny blunt description of something. XD
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
hahaha. perhaps narrative poetry is more appealing to you?

because I have a gallery FULL of that stuff ;D
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IllEatYourself Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Cool! Maybe I will check it out someday, although I am not super inclined to do so right now. XD You can check out my own gallery on Fanfiction.net and Fictionpress.com to see some of the poems I have made. They might give an example of what I tend to like. All or nearly all of them rhyme, but that was the kind of poem I liked to do back when I wrote them often and they were the ones I found the easiest to make without them sounding ridiculous, since I know the rhyming styles best. Why not check them out and give me your opinion on them? I could use some feedback. ;)
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012   Writer
I certainly will. Hold me to that.

:highfive:
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IllEatYourself Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I will try to!
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grayamir Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Snaps for you. :worship:
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012   Writer
then you wonderful folks deserve the crackles and pops.

;)
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Hayleyishayley Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on being a Daily Deviation. I'm very interested in this poem, but I don't understand what it's about.

I like the rhythm of the second verse best :)
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012   Writer
Thanks! I'm glad you were able to make some sense of it, hahaha.
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The way I've always loosely interpreted it, is that it is someone trying to say something, possibly "I love you," but they can't get past uttering the 'I'.

That's how I think of it. In reality, this piece is a tribute to another writer, and the poem above is describing him and the nature of his writing.
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Hayleyishayley Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Reading back over it, I can see where your interpretation is coming from, which makes sense.

I can also see how it is a tribute to the other writer - cheers for the link btw, he is a wonderful writer.

Thanks!
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GrayEngel Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student General Artist
i didn't understand it, but very well written!
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012   Writer
Nic has the right idea, but I love hearing other people's interpretations. That's what makes poetry poetry.
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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randomlyinspired-21 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student Writer
:heart:
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012   Writer
:glomp:
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Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconclappingplz:
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012   Writer
:woot:
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Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:happybounce:
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